"As much as I may dislike the storyteller format of the article,"
Thinking about it a bit more, there is nothing wrong with the story format. It is just that (I think) it doesn't work in this case.
The story with "He who is without sin, let him cast the first stone" in probably better than a bald statement of "don't be a hypocrite" (or whatever the moral of the story is supposed to be). But when you are hearing the story for the first time, you are drawn into it and held there till it ends and then you snap out of it and you are back in the real world.
It is just that in this case, I, the reader, was made aware that he is reading a story while I was reading it (vs being sucked into it) and every time a point came up I felt like I was being bludgeoned with it.
But then again, I thought "Godel, Escher, Bach" was pretentious and wordy, so it is highly probable that I just have weird tastes.
Again, I don't want to harp on this too much. Just offering some feedback which may (or may not ) be useful to Reginald.
Thinking about it a bit more, there is nothing wrong with the story format. It is just that (I think) it doesn't work in this case.
The story with "He who is without sin, let him cast the first stone" in probably better than a bald statement of "don't be a hypocrite" (or whatever the moral of the story is supposed to be). But when you are hearing the story for the first time, you are drawn into it and held there till it ends and then you snap out of it and you are back in the real world.
It is just that in this case, I, the reader, was made aware that he is reading a story while I was reading it (vs being sucked into it) and every time a point came up I felt like I was being bludgeoned with it.
But then again, I thought "Godel, Escher, Bach" was pretentious and wordy, so it is highly probable that I just have weird tastes.
Again, I don't want to harp on this too much. Just offering some feedback which may (or may not ) be useful to Reginald.